It's quite obviously a parody/tribute to the original 'dot dot dot'. It shows.
However, like many tribute-flashes, it has a distinct drop in quality.
The Intro animation looked gimmicky and off-centred, and poorly timed, some of the transitions were compositionally awful. The voice-acting was, whilst good, noticeably sub-par to the first work. It lacks confidence, which severely impacts fluency and artistic intonation.
Plus there was a little white line on the left side of the screen the whole time - that bugged me a bit, too.
Don't get me wrong though, it's still an enjoyable, well-coordinated piece of work, with a good message that's long overdue around here - needless to say, most people won't even notice it's them that's being ridiculed. Although I believe I do notice a slightly heightened attempt at literacy in the local reviews, so perhaps there's still hope.
It's a nice vid. But I'd still forgive you if you labeled it a prototype and made an improved version.
In fact I'd commend you for your perfectionism, because I know I'd certainly not bother working on this beauty anymore after publishing if it were mine.
It isn't though, and I hope you understand what I mean.
Thanks for the review :) And yeah, my internet here in Australia is ridiculously slow and I have not yet watched this video no Newgrounds, so bugs I cannot fix. But thanks for the advice mate, and next time this will be noted :)
In itself, this is a pretty good flash, but it stands in the awkward position of having to be compared to the first flash I saw to this song, by Spinnerdisc. I'll say up front that the artwork and detailing on your vid is far more advanced, but the charm that Spinnerdisc's video had was that every image fit the song in both timing and words, creating a lovely unity with the music.
This video lacks that.
Oh, it's there occasionally, such as the 'stars' appearing in time with the string plucks, and at a few other junctions, but it's fragmented and creates the sense that the image is only loosely connected to the song, but still stuck here and there with a few erratic seams.
The animation seems 'overly tweened', which is not to say that you used too many tweens, but rather that their use was inexperienced and unsure.
At other times the animation seemed unambitious: I liked the part where the lines suddenly visually transform into strings by being plucked, but any part of the screen at that point where strings aren't being plucked is empty and dead, lacking some extra filling. A bit anticlimactic after such elaborate graphics in the previous moments.
There's plenty potential in there, though. I suggest that you experiment with tweens some more, work on your frame-by-frame a little extra, and experience what I mean by seeing yourself improve.
It shouldn't be too hard, but that doesn't mean it's not going to take time and effort.
Very sweet! (Or salty, I didn't catch which)
Lies! You came up with this all by yourself =D
More dialogue than I'm used to from you, but it fit very nicely indeed.
The screams were hilarious.
Valsteri's got a point, though.
Well, there's a surprise
I hadn't expected to have the impact to make it into the fabled thanks-to credits! A very nice surprise indeed.
On the flash, though, this was completely different to the first, in the way that it lacked some of the mystery that the first had, and gained what it didn't, which was action. Well-executed action, too. And, indeed, as promised, no noticeable spelling mistakes :3
In fact, the two flashes could in fact be seen as completely loose from each other, despite the fact that the stories follow up and the art is the same. Each has a different charm, and this is the rowdy rebel-escape gunner show rather than the arty-mystery what's-going-on-here thrillthing.
Both are great. Neither is better, since everyone has their favourites in style. (Mine would be the first, though, since I tend to have a soft spot for vids that break the norm by not killing everything).
Great work. I hope to see more. Oh, and before I forget: I noticed when the 'lights' went out, the rocks still had shadows and the sky still was a dark cyan. Was that intentional?
Good job with the reply at wiseguy7, by the way.
Gratz and support,
Thanks, I couldn't have described both parts better myself lol. And the shadowing/sky stayed the same because I just made a black square over the whole screen and alphaed it lol. So yeah it was pretty lazy. Thanks for all the input, and I'm glad you came back to watch part 2! :3
There's more behind this story. I'm curious to see the rest.
The moments where the characters did move showed a good presence of animation, the mysterious feel it all has does intrigue, and seems to hide quite the story.
It was a bit choppy, though. And I don't mean the shaky animation. I'm well aware that that's a style, but as finderr pointed out, there's too many darkened screens going 'later', etc. It minces the experience quite some. I'm not saying you shouldn't use them at all, but some moderation would be nice.
Last and certainly least, learn the difference between 'to' and 'too'. It's not that important, but when I see those types of mistakes it makes me cringe. That's just me, though. Perhaps I shouldn't have said anything about it.
I want to see what this world looks like. I eagerly await the second.
Thank you for your review! And I'll make sure to get the "to" and "too" right next time ;) I'm going to use a different way to transition the animation next time, it should fix up the "later..." things all together :3
There's so little on this world that makes me laugh, yet these vids of yours never fail.
I realised I hadn't reviewed this one, so I'll add some effort and answer the questions you ask at the end of the vid.
1. Yes, in TRAD. *Muahahahahah*
3. K, but sex change first, yes?
6. I can't count either.
I've gotta remember that FrikkenOw(tm) thing...
Not quite what I expected to see from you... You caught me off-guard!
Nice to see the ambition's working up a bit, what with the full-body character animation and all, even if the guy's expression doesn't change in the slightest x3
I think it's fantastic how you can keep finding inspiration for fun shorts like these... It's a quality I find myself severely lacking in.
As always, MaikMoar(tm)!
Figured it out then, have ye?
This amazing piece of work will probably have quite an impact on a hell of a lot of different people, and in that sense, is contributing to making the world a better place.
That, more than anything is a straight 10 from me, for lack of a bonus score.
And additionally, you managed to stay modest about it, and didn't insult anyone or anything directly or indirectly (except for maybe George Bush, using his likeness as a visual for confusion), and that makes you the very besterest of my friends-I've-not-yet-met by the sheer overpowering presence of wisdom.
Experience? Anyone can experience this. You realised it, too.
May your life be filled with prosperity!
Damnit, I love this.
Saying 'Gharrr yeh beat meh' here seems unnecessary, since I already knew you would should you ever have even a half-assed go at the lazy random 'and now this happens'-ing that I call animating. I just had no idea you already had. Lovely animation, once again. I should get off my lazy arse and do some higher framerates and fuller characters myself.
Woah, does that mean you inspire me? Only time will tell, I guess.
I guess we'll wait and see then, eh? :)
Beautiful as usual, Boogley!
I am currently slapping myself for not having found your work earlier. Author fave!
I love the characters and their connection to the music. Excellent stuff.
I'm currently slapping myself just because it feels good
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