It's quite obviously a parody/tribute to the original 'dot dot dot'. It shows.
However, like many tribute-flashes, it has a distinct drop in quality.
The Intro animation looked gimmicky and off-centred, and poorly timed, some of the transitions were compositionally awful. The voice-acting was, whilst good, noticeably sub-par to the first work. It lacks confidence, which severely impacts fluency and artistic intonation.
Plus there was a little white line on the left side of the screen the whole time - that bugged me a bit, too.
Don't get me wrong though, it's still an enjoyable, well-coordinated piece of work, with a good message that's long overdue around here - needless to say, most people won't even notice it's them that's being ridiculed. Although I believe I do notice a slightly heightened attempt at literacy in the local reviews, so perhaps there's still hope.
It's a nice vid. But I'd still forgive you if you labeled it a prototype and made an improved version.
In fact I'd commend you for your perfectionism, because I know I'd certainly not bother working on this beauty anymore after publishing if it were mine.
It isn't though, and I hope you understand what I mean.
Thanks for the review :) And yeah, my internet here in Australia is ridiculously slow and I have not yet watched this video no Newgrounds, so bugs I cannot fix. But thanks for the advice mate, and next time this will be noted :)
In itself, this is a pretty good flash, but it stands in the awkward position of having to be compared to the first flash I saw to this song, by Spinnerdisc. I'll say up front that the artwork and detailing on your vid is far more advanced, but the charm that Spinnerdisc's video had was that every image fit the song in both timing and words, creating a lovely unity with the music.
This video lacks that.
Oh, it's there occasionally, such as the 'stars' appearing in time with the string plucks, and at a few other junctions, but it's fragmented and creates the sense that the image is only loosely connected to the song, but still stuck here and there with a few erratic seams.
The animation seems 'overly tweened', which is not to say that you used too many tweens, but rather that their use was inexperienced and unsure.
At other times the animation seemed unambitious: I liked the part where the lines suddenly visually transform into strings by being plucked, but any part of the screen at that point where strings aren't being plucked is empty and dead, lacking some extra filling. A bit anticlimactic after such elaborate graphics in the previous moments.
There's plenty potential in there, though. I suggest that you experiment with tweens some more, work on your frame-by-frame a little extra, and experience what I mean by seeing yourself improve.
It shouldn't be too hard, but that doesn't mean it's not going to take time and effort.
Very sweet! (Or salty, I didn't catch which)
Lies! You came up with this all by yourself =D
More dialogue than I'm used to from you, but it fit very nicely indeed.
The screams were hilarious.
Valsteri's got a point, though.
Fantastic yet not quite enough...
Loved most every aspect of it. The oddness of the whole thing was lovely.
However, I preferred the first version, before the walk-back puzzle's walls were heightened. It made me think. Just because part of the public can't solve it first try doesn't mean you should lower the bar.
Another nitpick I have it that it feels incomplete... Perhaps that's just part of its charm, but I feel there may be some ideas that were left out of this piece of art for some arbitrary reason.
The ending is pure genius.
I liked it muchly.
I've got to remind myself not to give tens too often, but this gem snatches away my choices.
Oh the marvel.
Oh the drama.
Oh consarn it you made me lose The Game... again!
The acrid mix of dark humour, devious platforming, political satire and sugarless coffee breaks, topped with a world-ending final battle makes this the sweetest bit of bittersweet "This Is Your World"-ery I've come across in a long time.
And the music!
I'll be whistling/humming that tune for a while.
Excellent concept, no-nonsense controls, a lovely little soundtrack and quite a deep storyline for a game so simple and short.
It really does.
It's a sweet and mild tune, and I love the peacefulness it simply radiates.
This song is going to be a great help laying off the frustration whilst working, and I thank thee for that.
It's also long and varied enough to lose myself in easily, and it had looped twice without my noticing, so that's done quite seamlessly too! The mellowed-out state of mind it creates just completely misses the pause, I notice as I type this :3
It's really hard to perfect a piece (or more like impossible, since you can never please everyone), and to be truly honest I shouldn't be giving this a 10, but a 9 just isn't good enough either.
Kudos to you sir.
Thank you very much! I've never worked this hard on a song before.
I'm glad to see my hard work pays off in the end though :)
Thanks for listening!
Definitely the same tune, and well put together.
I find it hard to rate music since if it sounds good, what can be added?
In any case, this sounded very nice indeed. I hope it gets found by a worth animator sometime, so's to make it known.
aw why thank you for the kind words and review.
Certainly had the retro feel I so love about game music. Fave'd just for the hell of it.
Good use of the NES system, composed like a professional. Kudos to you!
Nice one, Puffy!
Definitely one for the charts.
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